Can You Rewrite The Following Sentences To Improve Objectivity And To Incorporate An Impersonal Style?

Unfortunately, you forgot to add the sentences that you wanted to change. However, I will give you some tips to incorporate objectivity in your writing. Always use to the point language. Don't show emotions or sympathy in your writing. Use of words like feel or like often creates a personal touch so avoid them whenever possible.

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My apologies for this, i did try but it did not copy and paste not to worry here they are and thanks, jenefer

Improve the following sentences to assure accurate use of nouns and/or pronouns. The suggested revisions are below.

1.The system change has improved client service. This has resulted in fewer returns of merchandise
2.The memorandum reviewed the progress of several departments. It created quite a few misunderstandings
3. Problems of the past caused changes in personal, budgeting, and follow-up. As things turned out, they were probably timely

Rewrite the following sentences to improve objectivity and to incorporate an interpersonal style

1.The enormous increase of 32 percent proves the sales department has done a superb job
2.The proposed procedure is bad because it would require an inordinate amount of employee time -15 percent to be exact
3.The deplorable turnover rate could be reduced by about half –to 12 per-cent – if fringe benefits could be introduced
4.The enormous increase of 33 percent was a result of the amazing growth in city population of 10.000 during the past year.
5.The horrible effect on employees from the change in parking regulations will be on of creating massive in - and – out traffic problems at the beginning and end of the day
6.The writer surveyed 15 organisations to examine management styles
7.We found formal checklists used in 14 of the 15 organisations we surveyed

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